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Gregory Tucker

Dialogue

      We were in the room alone, and I was scared.       "Where is it!" The man yelled at me. The sound echoing in the room.       "I don't know what your talking about," I said while tied to a chair, blindfolded.       "I'm not stupid. The money didn't just disappear. I know you have it." He slapped me and I fell sideways to the floor. The rope that tied me to the chair brushed against my skin, burning me.       I hissed from the pain and yelled "I don't have it!" as the burn started to dull. I could here him loading a gun behind me.       "We have witnesses that saw you take it," He bluffed as he cocked the gun.       I chuckled, "You'll never find it."       "You will regret ever stealing from us." Bang.

Personal Narritive

      I wrote my personal narrative about the summer job I got at Chick-Fil-A. It is about one customer in particular and how their words affected me. I am having a little trouble with the one line in the dialogue sounding a little cheesy and I will be changing that. I have a little too much description of the restaurant  at the beginning and will hopefully be changing that too.       I hope that I have enough details that the reader can see the situation playing out. I also think the end is too direct in the meaning but hope it isn't too direct. I think it is an accurate situation to show the community at Chick-Fil-A I experienced.

Week 4 Comments

Katherine Dear 13 Year Old Nick Dear 12 year Old

Dear 12 Year Olds

     Dear 12 year olds, have fun. Don't stand in the back and be shy. Instead, go and make some friends and do whatever you think is fun. Do things that 40 year old you will tell to your kids as a cool story on how great life is. Make memories you can look back on and smile or laugh.      Dear 12 year olds, don't stress about everything. Things will work out one way or another no matter what situation your in. It doesn't matter if its a ton of homework or your in the hospital, things will work out and you'll be able to move on.

Us and Them

      Us and Them has a theme showing how we need to spend time with our family. Unfortunately, I have fallen into the point this book is talking about, people spending more time on TV and other electronics than with their family.       At the dinner table, my dad just installed a TV to the wall to watch football games. We don't talk much at dinner because of our phones but we do talk in the car and other times like that. Sometimes we don't even sit down at the same time to eat. I think it should be more important to communicate and bond with our family than stare at our phone and TV.

Comments Week 3

Evan 911 Grace 911